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#1
Alright people. I want you to modify the text below. Make it looking more professional and fix grammar errors. If you think we should add more thing please also suggest them.


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Hello people. At this article, on behalf of Monster MMORPG, I would like to present to you A New Spin On [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com]Pokemon[/url], complete with Original Monsters and a true [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Register]MMORPG[/url]-Feel. This game is guaranteed free to play, forever. It isn't a fan made game, so rest assured that it's different from Pokemon in all the right ways. Most importantly among these is that it cannot be shut down by Nintendo like other [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Pokemon-Games]Pokemon Games[/url] out there because we don't use any of Nintendo’s Trademarked & Copyrighted material.

Now let’s talk about some of the main components of this game. This game at it's core is about Monsters, making it similar to Pokemon. You are exploring professionally designed [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Maps]Maps[/url] (there are currently 83) and trying to collect Monsters. You have to do battle with them and catch them before they are tame enough to be trained. You will not only be battling Wild Monsters but also you can battle a [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/MonsterDex]Monster[/url] team made by one of your friends. Yes, that means we have a working PvP system. To give you a mild idea about how advanced the battling system really is: it contains thirteen THOUSAND lines of code! MonsterMMORPG also has an integrated chat system coded specifically for the game. So while playing the game, you can also chat with your fellow players. It supports a total of 32 different languages.

-) At this point, you're probably wondering what this game looks like and how to play it.
- This is the game main page: [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com]www.monstermmorpg.com[/url].
- This is the official game videos page: [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Videos]www.monstermmorpg.com/Videos[/url]. If you watch the game videos, you will understand all the important stuff.
- The game screenshots can be found here: [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Screenshots]www.monstermmorpg.com/Screenshots[/url].
- If you want to advertise, we have awesome banners for you: [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Banners]www.monstermmorpg.com/Banners[/url].
- When you're ready to register, go here: [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Register]www.monstermmorpg.com/Register[/url].
- This links you to the list of Monsters currently in-game: [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/MonsterDex]www.monstermmorpg.com/MonsterDex[/url].
- MonsterMMORPG has a DeviantArt group for any Deviants who'd like to join: [url=https://pokemon-fakemon-game.deviantart.com]MonsterMMORPG DeviantArt[/url].
- For our official Youtube, Twitter and Facebook channels, go here and subscribe: [url=https://www.youtube.com/user/MonsterMMORPG]www.youtube.com/user/MonsterMMORPG[/url], [url=https://twitter.com/MonsterMMORPG]https://twitter.com/MonsterMMORPG[/url], [url=https://www.facebook.com/MonsterMMORPG]www.facebook.com/MonsterMMORPG[/url].

If you haven't already peeked at our unique features for yourself, we'll lay down the basics:

* MonsterMMORPG has a strict policy against cheating. Because of this very reason MonsterMMORPG is taking every possible precaution such as checking every action at server side, having in game integrated security image question after a certain number of actions.
* MonsterMMORPG is also trying to maintain content acceptable for every age group so parents can safely allow their children to play.
* MonsterMMORPG has a very strong and reliable server, so you can play the game anytime, anywhere without lag.
* MonsterMMORPG has awesomely designed game mechanics. The Monsters' Moves have tons of great effects such as "bleeding", "multiple hit", "2 turn moves", "burning", "crippling" and many more.
* MonsterMMORPG has 100 different natures which makes Monsters even more different.
* MonsterMMORPG uses a Unique Values system which is determined when a Wild Monster is caught which makes each monster statistically unique.
* MonsterMMORPG includes a Training Points system which lets users specialize in certain stats and helps make each Monster even MORE their own.

And that hardly scratches the surface. If you really want to know what you're about, immerse yourself in the Monster MMORPG.

We strongly suggest you to watch our tutorial videos while playing the game. Latest tutorial videos always can be found here : [url=https://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PL89772D2A75FC43B3]Monster MMORPG Tutorial Videos PlayList On Youtube[/url]

[b]Very important notices :
1- For walking on the map use either w,a,s,d or arrow keys on the keyboard. Keep pressing them for smooth moving.
2- Game works best on Firefox latest version or Google Chrome latest version[/b]

As a matter of fact, here we'll let the game speak for itself. Please click on images to see them in full size.
#2
I'll go through and correct the grammar errors on wordpad...I'll edit this post when I'm done Smile Corrections made...just copy and paste it Tongue



Dear gamers. I hope you are all fine. At this article I am going to present you a new browser based Pokemon Style Monster MMORPG Game. This game is totally free to play forever.

Now lets talk about some of the main components of this game. This game is about Monsters just like Pokemon You are exploring professionally designed maps (of which there are 83 right now) and trying to collect monsters. You have to battle with them and catch them before you are able to train the,. You are not only battling wild Monsters but also you can battle a monster team made by one of your friends. Yes we have a very well working PVP system For giving you idea about how advanced the battling system it is 13k lines of code ^^ Monster MMORPG also has an integrated chat system. The chat system is not a pre-made one, it is developed for Monster MMORPG by the game developer. So while playing the game, you can also chat with your fellow players. It supports total 32 different languages.

Now I suppose you wonder what this game looks like or how do I play it. This is the game main page url : https://www.monstermmorpg.com . This is the official game videos page : https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Videos . If you watch the game videos you will learn how to play at least 95% percent. The game screenshots can be found from here https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Screenshots . Also we have awesome banners if you want to check out : https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Banners . This is the registration url : https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Register . The list of monsters that Monster MMORPG can be found here : https://www.monstermmorpg.com/MonsterDex . MonsterMMORPG also has a DeviantArt group so if you are DeviantArt member you can also join our group : https://pokemon-fakemon-game.deviantart.com/ . Monster MMORPG also has official Youtube, Twitter and Facebook channels so you also may want to subscribes those channels : https://www.youtube.com/user/MonsterMMORPG , https://twitter.com/MonsterMMORPG , https://www.facebook.com/MonsterMMORPG

Since we have provided the necessary urls now lets tell you some unique features we have:

* MonsterMMORPG as a policy and principle is strictly against cheating. Because of this very reason MonsterMMORPG is taking every possible precautions such as checking every action at server side, having in game integrated security image question after certain number of actions.
* MonsterMMORPG is also trying to make its game available for every age group so parents can safely allow their children to play the game.
* MonsterMMORPG has a very strong server which almost never fails, so you can play the game anytime, anywhere without lag.
* MonsterMMORPG has awesomely designed game mechanics. The Monster moves have lots of great effects such as : bleeding, multiple hit, 2 turn moves, burning, crippling and many more.
* MonsterMMORPG has 100 different natures which makes each monster is unique.
* MonsterMMORPG has Unique Values system which is determined when a wild Monster is caught which makes each monster unique.
* MonsterMMORPG has Training Points system which lets users specialize in certain stats and helps make each Monster unique.

- Many more great features that are waiting to be explored by you.

Okay we talked too much now let the game screenshots talk ^^
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#3
ad is updated. also i added this line


Dear gamers. I hope you are all fine. At this article I am going to present you a new browser based Pokemon Style Monster MMORPG Game. This game is totally free to play forever. This is also not a fan made game so be sure that it safe. It can not get shut down by Nintendo like other Pokemon Games out there because Monster MMORPG does not use any of the Nintendo Trademarked & Copyrighted material.
#4
I am still doing my version Smile

I'm doing it piece by piece so you know how to put it together.
#5
(2011-11-16, 09:46 PM)Deidara Wrote: I am still doing my version Smile

I'm doing it piece by piece so you know how to put it together.
ok. this is very important. we will use this at every place Smile
#6
Ill work on it cefurkan and update this later.
Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.
#7
yes thanks orbo I just went through and got the obvious grammar mistakes Smile
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#8
I can't post mine since my computer shut off when I was literally almost done with it. =_=
#9
(2011-11-16, 10:04 PM)Deidara Wrote: I can't post mine since my computer shut off when I was literally almost done with it. =_=
damn. i was waiting it. write again but save this time

#10
After the 1st 2 paragraphs I'll post then update.
#11
Just edited the original template a bit

Dear gamers. I hope you are all fine.In this article I am going to present to you a new browser based Pokemon Style Monster MMORPG Game. This game is totally free to play. You will never be charged for it. This is also not a fan made game so be sure that it safe. It cannot be shut down by Nintendo like other Pokemon Games out there because Monster MMORPG does not use any of Nintendo’s Trademarked & Copyrighted material.

Now let’s talk about some of the main components of this game. This game is about Monsters just like Pokemon is. You are exploring professionally designed maps (of which there are 83 right now) and trying to collect monsters. You have to battle with them and catch them before you are able to train them. You will not only be battling wild Monsters but also you can battle a monster team made by one of your friends. Yes we have a working PVP system. For giving your idea about how advanced the battling system,it contains 13k lines of code ^^ Monster MMORPG also has an integrated chat system. The chat system is not a pre-made one, it is developed for Monster MMORPG by the game developer. So while playing the game, you can also chat with your fellow players. It supports a total of 32 different languages.

Now I suppose you are wondering what this game looks like or how to play it. This is the game main page url : https://www.monstermmorpg.com . This is the official game videos page : https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Videos . If you watch the game videos you will learn how to play at least 95% percent of the game. The game screenshots can be found from here https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Screenshots . Also we have awesome banners if you want to check out : https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Banners . This is the registration url : https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Register . The list of monsters that Monster MMORPGutilizes can be found here : https://www.monstermmorpg.com/MonsterDex . MonsterMMORPG also has a DeviantArt group so if you are DeviantArt member you can also join our group : https://pokemon-fakemon-game.deviantart.com/ . Monster MMORPG also has official Youtube, Twitter and Facebook channels so you also may want to subscribes those channels : https://www.youtube.com/user/MonsterMMORPG , https://twitter.com/MonsterMMORPG , https://www.facebook.com/MonsterMMORPG

Since we have provided the necessary urls now let us tell you some unique features we have:

* MonsterMMORPG has a strict policy against cheating. Because of this very reason MonsterMMORPG is taking every possible precaution such as checking every action at server side, having in game integrated security image question after a certain number of actions.
* MonsterMMORPG is also trying to make its game available for every age group so parents can safely allow their children to play the game.
* MonsterMMORPG has a very strong server which almost never fails, so you can play the game anytime, anywhere without lag.
* MonsterMMORPG has awesomely designed game mechanics. The Monster moves have lots of great effects such as: bleeding, multiple hit, 2 turn moves, burning, crippling and many more.
* MonsterMMORPG has 100 different natures which makes each monster is unique.
* MonsterMMORPG has a Unique Values system which is determined when a wild Monster is caught which makes each monster statistically different
* MonsterMMORPG has a Training Points system which lets users specialize in certain stats and helps make each Monster unique.

And there are many more great features that are waiting to be explored by you.

Okay we have talked too much; now let the game speak for itself.
Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.
#12
(2011-11-16, 09:07 PM)CeFurkan Wrote: Dear gamers. I hope you are all fine. At this article I am going to present you a new browser based Pokemon Style Monster MMORPG Game. This game is totally free to play forever. This is also not a fan made game so be sure that it safe. It can not get shut down by Nintendo like other Pokemon Games out there because Monster MMORPG does not use any of the Nintendo Trademarked & Copyrighted material.

Quote:Now lets talk about some of the main components of this game. This game is about Monsters just like Pokemon You are exploring professionally designed maps (of which there are 83 right now) and trying to collect monsters. You have to battle with them and catch them before you are able to train the,. You are not only battling wild Monsters but also you can battle a monster team made by one of your friends. Yes we have a very well working PVP system For giving you idea about how advanced the battling system it is 13k lines of code ^^ Monster MMORPG also has an integrated chat system. The chat system is not a pre-made one, it is developed for Monster MMORPG by the game developer. So while playing the game, you can also chat with your fellow players. It supports total 32 different languages.


I'll work on links differently.


Quote:Since we have provided the necessary urls now lets tell you some unique features we have:

* MonsterMMORPG as a policy and principle is strictly against cheating. Because of this very reason MonsterMMORPG is taking every possible precautions such as checking every action at server side, having in game integrated security image question after certain number of actions.
* MonsterMMORPG is also trying to make its game available for every age group so parents can safely allow their children to play the game.
* MonsterMMORPG has a very strong server which almost never fails, so you can play the game anytime, anywhere without lag.
* MonsterMMORPG has awesomely designed game mechanics. The Monster moves have lots of great effects such as : bleeding, multiple hit, 2 turn moves, burning, crippling and many more.
* MonsterMMORPG has 100 different natures which makes each monster is unique.
* MonsterMMORPG has Unique Values system which is determined when a wild Monster is caught which makes each monster unique.
* MonsterMMORPG has Training Points system which lets users specialize in certain stats and helps make each Monster unique.

- Many more great features that are waiting to be explored by you.

Okay we talked too much now let the game screenshots talk ^^
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I'm posting quote tags first so it's more spaced out and organized. Then, I'll update.
#13
hmm I will see what I can do
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#14
can i do this tomorrow? i might have more time for it then.
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Dont mess with the Samu or else you'll be left to rott in the Sanzu.
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#15
I'll work on this tomorrow, I'm sorry.

I am.. Really enraged right now because my computer shut off again. I don't remember what I put down so I'll do it tomorrow after school when I'm calmer than I am right now.

I typed this respectfully trying to control my anger.. I'm going to go chill offline.
#16
(2011-11-16, 11:06 PM)Deidara Wrote: I'll work on this tomorrow, I'm sorry.

I am.. Really enraged right now because my computer shut off again. I don't remember what I put down so I'll do it tomorrow after school when I'm calmer than I am right now.

I typed this respectfully trying to control my anger.. I'm going to go chill offline.
I bet you cried.

I'll Try this just for fuuuun :3
Your life just got better. 

You're welcome.

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#17
please use the code at the first post when editing
#18
ok then will do
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Credits to SparrowHawk
#20
don't forget to work on this
#21
do we still need to wrap it in code?
Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.
#22
(2011-11-17, 07:09 PM)orboknown Wrote: do we still need to wrap it in code?
yes please use the latest version at the above

you can also add remove and modify
#23
i cant do this sorry i have too many things at the moment.I am dreadfully sorry
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Credits to SparrowHawk
#24
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Dear gamer, I hope you're fine. On behalf of Monster MMORPG (or M3O for short), I would like to present to you [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com]A New Spin On Pokemon[/url], complete with [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/monsterdex]Original Monsters[/url] and a true [url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com]MMORPG-Feel[/url]. This game is guaranteed free to play, forever. It isn't a fan made game, so rest assured that it's different from Pokemon in all the right ways. Most importantly among these is that it cannot be shut down by Nintendo like other Pokemon Games out there because we don't use any of Nintendo’s Trademarked & Copyrighted material.

Now let’s talk about some of the main components of this game. This game at it's core is about Monsters, making it similar to Pokemon. You are exploring professionally designed Maps (there are currently 83) and trying to collect Monsters. You have to do battle with them and catch them before they are tame enough to be trained. You will not only be battling Wild Monsters but also you can battle a Monster team made by one of your friends. Yes, that means we have a working PvP system. To give you a mild idea about how advanced the battling system really is: it contains thirteen [b]THOUSAND[/b] lines of code! M3O also has an integrated chat system coded specifically for the game. So while playing the game, you can also chat with your fellow players. It supports an unheard of total of 32 different languages.

At this point, you're probably wondering what this game looks like and how to play it. Here are some key relevant links:

[list]
[*][url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com]Main Page[/url].
[*][url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Videos]Videos and Visual Tutorials[/url]
[*][url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Screenshots]In-Game Screenshots[/url]
[*][url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Banners]Banners and Advertising[/url]
[*][url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Register]Register Page[/url]
[*][url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/MonsterDex]MonsterDex[/url]
[/list]

M3O has a DeviantArt group for any Deviants who'd like to join: [url=https://pokemon-fakemon-game.deviantart.com]Click Here[/url]. We run [url=https://www.youtube.com/user/MonsterMMORPG]YouTube[/url], [url=https://twitter.com/MonsterMMORPG]Twitter[/url] and [url=www.facebook.com/MonsterMMORPG]Facebook[/url] channels, so be sure to subscribe, visit, and add.

If you haven't already peeked at our unique features for yourself, we'll lay down the basics:

[list]
[*]MonsterMMORPG has a strict policy against cheating. Because of this very reason MonsterMMORPG is taking every possible precaution such as checking every action at server side, having in game integrated security image question after a certain number of actions.
[*]MonsterMMORPG is also trying to maintain content acceptable for every age group so parents can safely allow their children to play.
[*]MonsterMMORPG has a very strong and reliable server, so you can play the game anytime, anywhere without lag.
[*]MonsterMMORPG has awesomely designed game mechanics. The Monsters' Moves have tons of great effects such as "bleeding", "multiple hit", "2 turn moves", "burning", "crippling" and many more.
[*]MonsterMMORPG has 100 different natures which makes Monsters even more different.
[*]MonsterMMORPG uses a Unique Values system which is determined when a Wild Monster is caught which makes each monster statistically unique.
[*]MonsterMMORPG includes a Training Points system which lets users specialize in certain stats and helps make each Monster even MORE their own.
[*]MonsterMMORPG doesn't require you to click to navigate maps like most traditional browser games; instead, use w, a, s, d or your arrow keys to save yourself some clicking. If you want to cover large distances quickly, the in-game button can be set to move up to nine steps per one click.
[/list]

And that barely scratches the surface. If you really want to know what you're about, immerse yourself in the world we've created.

As a matter of fact, here we'll let the game speak for itself. Please click on images to see them in full size.

Any grammar issues or unprofessional repetition has been removed. I may make an alternate version of this for you written in my own words, which I promise you will flow nicely.
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#25
url=https://www.monstermmorpg.com/Videos]www.monstermmorpg.com/Videos[/url].
If you watch the game videos you will learn how to play at least 90% percent of the game
percent shouldnt be included again
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Credits to SparrowHawk
#26
alright the main text is updated once again

@[b]Raith can you please check again all. i very slightly modified your post[/b]
#27
Oh sorry, I just noticed I forgot to add the URL coding in. I'm used to seeing just the source text in advanced replies. Fixing now.

EDIT: Fix'd and updated.
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#28
(2011-11-18, 12:18 AM)Raith Wrote: Oh sorry, I just noticed I forgot to add the URL coding in. I'm used to seeing just the source text in advanced replies. Fixing now.
use first post updated for fixing
#29
(2011-11-18, 12:29 AM)CeFurkan Wrote:
(2011-11-18, 12:18 AM)Raith Wrote: Oh sorry, I just noticed I forgot to add the URL coding in. I'm used to seeing just the source text in advanced replies. Fixing now.
use first post updated for fixing
Yup, I know :'D
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#30
once more update . added 3 more line


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[b]Very important notices :
1- For walking on the map use either w,a,s,d or arrow keys on the keyboard. Keep pressing them for smooth moving.
2- Game works best on Firefox latest version or Google Chrome latest version[/b]

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