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Pokemon - Crystal and Dark!
#1
Pokemon Adventures!
- Crystal and Dark!

Waking up in the morning my mom made me a perfect good breakfast.
"Thanks for the food mom" Ryan said.
"No worry, just eat," Mom said with a smile. "Professor told you to meet him in the lab."
"Ok, but whats in this ball?" Ryan asked politely.
"I don't know..." Mom said
"Guess Ill just open it." Ryan said lazy.
As Ryan opened it a Charmander appeared with a smile.
"Whoo Whoo!" Ryan yelled.
"Haa! What is this thing? Its gonna burn the house down ha!" Mom screamed as she ran downstairs.
"No ma, its a pokemon called Chamander." Ryan said laughing all the way to downstairs.
"Well what ever that is needs to be careful," Mom said. "Also get going to the lab."
Ryan got ready and left for the lab. "Surprised to see you here Ryan." Said Professor Jet.
"Good Morning Professor, and Thanks for the Charmander." Fire said happily.
"You Welcome, and I told you to come here to pick up your pokedex and poke balls," Professor said.
"You will need potions and other pokemon stuff like pokemon food etc."

"Thanks for all these things bye!" Ryan yelled waving bye-bye.
Ryan went and told his mom and left for the journey.
Going to Little Twinkle Ryan met up with a kid called Dark.

"Hey kid lets battle!" A kid said. "Ima test my pokemon"
"As you wish." Ryan said.
"Go Riolu!" Dark said. "Use Metal Claw!"

"Go Charmander, and use Ember while dodging" Ryan yelled his attack.
Riolu and Chamander got hit by each move.
"Whats the matter Riolu?" Dark said like a cowboy.
"Ember again!" Ryan demanded."Aim closely with the fire."
"Force Palm!" Dark said quickly.
"No chance, Inferno Charmander!" Ryan quickly said.
Charmander did Inferno and Riolu got burned and fainted.
"Useless Riolu" Dark said. He released it when it was returned to his poke ball.
Ryan caught it with his ultra ball and send it out.
"You and I are gonna travel together forever!" Ryan said happily.
Charmander and Riolu jumped and cheered happily.
As they went to Little Twinkle they met a Girl called Crystal.
"Go Sealeo, and use Ice Beam" Crystal called.
"Riolu Force Palm, Charmander Ember!" Ryan demanded quickly.
Charmander used a Flamethrower instead of Ember.
Flamethrower melted the Ice Beam and hit Sealeo and Riolu made Sealeo fainted.

"Ahhh.... Why?!?" Crystal yelled and ran to the pokemon center.
"Nice Job Charmander and Riolu!" Ryan went and hugged them.
Ryan finally arrived at Little Twinkle and went to the pokemon center and went shopping for stuff that was needed.
"So I need Pokemon Food, Poke Balls and 3 lunches please." Ryan told the shopping people.
"That will be 9,320 gold please." they replied.
"Ok." Ryan said.
As they got out they trained and saw a rainbow and a Ho-ho was right in the middle.
"Whoa, whats that pokemon?" Ryan said and reached for his Pokedex.
Unknown the Pokedex said.

The End


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#2
soo many errors i dont know where to start Confused

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#3
Updated. Please reread.
#4
still poor writing..and im pretty sure no trainer just starting would have an ultraball
Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.
#5
Erm, I could tell you the errors, but nobody has all day, right? hahah. But seriously though, you should really re-read your stuff 3-5 times before posting. Just to make sure it's good.
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