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Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
#1
Ting-Ting-ting! (Clock Ringing)

"Ryan come eat your breakfast!" called his Mom Bella.
"Ok!" Ryan yelled back downstairs while taking off his P.j's.
Ryan ran down to brush his teeth and wash his face.
"Whats for breakfast?" Ryan asked.
"Your favorite hot chocolate , cookies, and a good bake of a pie."
said Mom.
"Whoo pie...." said Ryan. "Ill have a neat day today.
"Professor told you to go to the lab and he left this weird looking ball."
Mom said with a confused face.
Ryan open and he was surprised to see a real Charmander.
Here's your breakfast honey.
After Ryan got done eating he head off to the labatory.
iLL CONTINUE

Ill continue im going to sleep.
Knowing if you judge others, life continue as the way it was..

And by the way The Game You Lost.
#2
I dont get the title Tongue
Your life just got better. 

You're welcome.

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#3
Does any1 else know what is wrong here?

This is what I see :

1. Useless "stories" are being created.
2. Useless "stories" are not being continued. At all.

#4
Umm...Wat? @.@ There's no storyline whatsoever...the grammars pretty bad, there's some words missing, and some extra descriptions would be good...*realizes he sounds slightly like Nitz*
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#5
He neeeever finishes his stories, but to be honest i never read them anymore.
Your life just got better. 

You're welcome.

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#6
(09-24-2011, 02:41 PM)Ghost Wrote: He neeeever finishes his stories, but to be honest i never read them anymore.
This one isn't even a paragraph let alone a chapter Dodgy
#7
We have same character name Ryan.
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#8
(09-24-2011, 02:08 PM)Deidara Wrote: Does any1 else know what is wrong here?

This is what I see :

1. Useless "stories" are being created.
2. Useless "stories" are not being continued. At all.
in all honesty, you didnt finish your stories either dei.as didnt grey or ghost. Nitz is the only one who has put a full story in place.

Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.
#9
(09-25-2011, 02:56 AM)orboknown Wrote:
(09-24-2011, 02:08 PM)Deidara Wrote: Does any1 else know what is wrong here?

This is what I see :

1. Useless "stories" are being created.
2. Useless "stories" are not being continued. At all.
in all honesty, you didnt finish your stories either dei.as didnt grey or ghost. Nitz is the only one who has put a full story in place.
Not that. I'm talking about all the Chapter 1s he created '-'

And it's too long to create a whole story r.r I don't like writing books.


#10
(09-25-2011, 02:58 AM)Deidara Wrote:
(09-25-2011, 02:56 AM)orboknown Wrote:
(09-24-2011, 02:08 PM)Deidara Wrote: Does any1 else know what is wrong here?

This is what I see :

1. Useless "stories" are being created.
2. Useless "stories" are not being continued. At all.
in all honesty, you didnt finish your stories either dei.as didnt grey or ghost. Nitz is the only one who has put a full story in place.
Not that. I'm talking about all the Chapter 1s he created '-'

And it's too long to create a whole story r.r I don't like writing books.
write a oneshot then.
Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.
#11
(09-25-2011, 03:09 AM)orboknown Wrote:
(09-25-2011, 02:58 AM)Deidara Wrote:
(09-25-2011, 02:56 AM)orboknown Wrote:
(09-24-2011, 02:08 PM)Deidara Wrote: Does any1 else know what is wrong here?

This is what I see :

1. Useless "stories" are being created.
2. Useless "stories" are not being continued. At all.
in all honesty, you didnt finish your stories either dei.as didnt grey or ghost. Nitz is the only one who has put a full story in place.
Not that. I'm talking about all the Chapter 1s he created '-'

And it's too long to create a whole story r.r I don't like writing books.
write a oneshot then.
I already did.

#12
then problem solved.
Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.
#13
(09-25-2011, 03:13 AM)orboknown Wrote: then problem solved.
This is about AuthorFire, not me.

Dodgy
#14
rawr.
he just needs to focus on one thing for more than 5 seconds.
Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.

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