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Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
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Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
Ting-Ting-ting! (Clock Ringing)

"Ryan come eat your breakfast!" called his Mom Bella.
"Ok!" Ryan yelled back downstairs while taking off his P.j's.
Ryan ran down to brush his teeth and wash his face.
"Whats for breakfast?" Ryan asked.
"Your favorite hot chocolate , cookies, and a good bake of a pie."
said Mom.
"Whoo pie...." said Ryan. "Ill have a neat day today.
"Professor told you to go to the lab and he left this weird looking ball."
Mom said with a confused face.
Ryan open and he was surprised to see a real Charmander.
Here's your breakfast honey.
After Ryan got done eating he head off to the labatory.
iLL CONTINUE

Ill continue im going to sleep.
Knowing if you judge others, life continue as the way it was..

And by the way The Game You Lost.
09-24-2011 12:28 PM
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RE: Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
I dont get the title Tongue
Your life just got better. 

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09-24-2011 12:38 PM
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RE: Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
Does any1 else know what is wrong here?

This is what I see :

1. Useless "stories" are being created.
2. Useless "stories" are not being continued. At all.
09-24-2011 02:08 PM
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RE: Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
Umm...Wat? @.@ There's no storyline whatsoever...the grammars pretty bad, there's some words missing, and some extra descriptions would be good...*realizes he sounds slightly like Nitz*
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RE: Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
He neeeever finishes his stories, but to be honest i never read them anymore.
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09-24-2011 02:41 PM
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RE: Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
(09-24-2011 02:41 PM)Ghost Wrote:  He neeeever finishes his stories, but to be honest i never read them anymore.
This one isn't even a paragraph let alone a chapter Dodgy
09-24-2011 02:56 PM
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RE: Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
We have same character name Ryan.
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09-24-2011 10:14 PM
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RE: Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
(09-24-2011 02:08 PM)Deidara Wrote:  Does any1 else know what is wrong here?

This is what I see :

1. Useless "stories" are being created.
2. Useless "stories" are not being continued. At all.
in all honesty, you didnt finish your stories either dei.as didnt grey or ghost. Nitz is the only one who has put a full story in place.
Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.
09-25-2011 02:56 AM
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RE: Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
(09-25-2011 02:56 AM)orboknown Wrote:  
(09-24-2011 02:08 PM)Deidara Wrote:  Does any1 else know what is wrong here?

This is what I see :

1. Useless "stories" are being created.
2. Useless "stories" are not being continued. At all.
in all honesty, you didnt finish your stories either dei.as didnt grey or ghost. Nitz is the only one who has put a full story in place.
Not that. I'm talking about all the Chapter 1s he created '-'

And it's too long to create a whole story r.r I don't like writing books.
09-25-2011 02:58 AM
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RE: Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
(09-25-2011 02:58 AM)Deidara Wrote:  
(09-25-2011 02:56 AM)orboknown Wrote:  
(09-24-2011 02:08 PM)Deidara Wrote:  Does any1 else know what is wrong here?

This is what I see :

1. Useless "stories" are being created.
2. Useless "stories" are not being continued. At all.
in all honesty, you didnt finish your stories either dei.as didnt grey or ghost. Nitz is the only one who has put a full story in place.
Not that. I'm talking about all the Chapter 1s he created '-'

And it's too long to create a whole story r.r I don't like writing books.
write a oneshot then.
Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.
09-25-2011 03:09 AM
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RE: Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
(09-25-2011 03:09 AM)orboknown Wrote:  
(09-25-2011 02:58 AM)Deidara Wrote:  
(09-25-2011 02:56 AM)orboknown Wrote:  
(09-24-2011 02:08 PM)Deidara Wrote:  Does any1 else know what is wrong here?

This is what I see :

1. Useless "stories" are being created.
2. Useless "stories" are not being continued. At all.
in all honesty, you didnt finish your stories either dei.as didnt grey or ghost. Nitz is the only one who has put a full story in place.
Not that. I'm talking about all the Chapter 1s he created '-'

And it's too long to create a whole story r.r I don't like writing books.
write a oneshot then.
I already did.
09-25-2011 03:13 AM
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RE: Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
then problem solved.
Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.
09-25-2011 03:13 AM
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(09-25-2011 03:13 AM)orboknown Wrote:  then problem solved.
This is about AuthorFire, not me.

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09-25-2011 03:14 AM
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RE: Chapter 1 - Why me Ghost?!?
rawr.
he just needs to focus on one thing for more than 5 seconds.
Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.
09-25-2011 03:16 AM
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