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Fix the too much Caps

What do u mean by that?

why is it all bolded?

to make it more cleat

Well seems cool

(2011-07-18, 11:48 AM)Rain127 Wrote: [ -> ]Fix the too much Caps

he means everytime you use a move u put it in caps

can anyone give me ideas on what the monster would be that sneaked up the grocieres? i got nothin

I'll review this like I would on fanfiction.net, so don't cry if you feel it is harsh.

"This lacks structure. The bolded words fail to make it clearer, in fact if anything it does the opposite of what you would like it to do. There should be well place paragraphs, ones that describe what is happening, rather than all of it being dialogue or action being in **'s. I think if you want it to be clear you should use Quotations "" and make some paragraphs. this is written more like a comic book without Pictures vs. a fully text artwork. I feel that there is a lack of effort to put together a properly worded and grammatically correct work of fanfiction.

Try harder and improve; you can do it, IF you put in the effort."

Hm make it a ghost monster like hmm....... idk really but a ghost one

roivile? bavante?

Bavante! seems better