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Internal Struggle
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Internal Struggle
In high school I had to write a poem for a class. My teacher sent it to a publisher and it ended up being published. I own the copywrite.

Internal Struggle

Spaceships falling from the sky,
Aliens after you and I.
When they find us, you will see,
The pain they cause will make you scream.

So if you must, run and hide,
But sooner or later, you, they will find.
Instead, I suggest, stand up and fight,
Battling them with all your might.

Be proud you gave your best.
That you didn't go running like the rest,
Since this way we had a chance
To preserve our future and save our past.

So if I shall fall in the night.
I know I wasn't a coward who took off in fright.
But even in our bleakest hour of terror.
At least I know I could look in a mirror.


I just wanted to share this with everyone. Quanto said this would be the best place to post it.

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Snoozn
11-12-2011 02:55 PM
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RE: Internal Struggle
This sounds pretty cool.
Your life just got better. 

You're welcome.

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11-12-2011 04:39 PM
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RE: Internal Struggle
Brilliant poem, I love it! Awesome job!
11-13-2011 05:08 AM
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RE: Internal Struggle
nice job snoozn.
Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.
11-15-2011 04:29 AM
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RE: Internal Struggle
outstanding poem snoozn
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11-15-2011 08:18 AM
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RE: Internal Struggle
Thank you everyone. Smile
11-16-2011 03:46 AM
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RE: Internal Struggle
Very good Poem!!!
I liked it
03-20-2012 01:21 PM
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Big Grin nice poem loved it
04-08-2012 09:10 AM
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RE: Internal Struggle
Wow, what a nice poem!
"A man who's lost his pride can never be free" 
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05-10-2012 05:38 PM
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This is such an awesome poem! Many thanks for such a nice post, I really had some fun while I was reading it!


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05-18-2012 01:34 AM
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Awesome poem! I'm an author myself. :3 Maybe I'll post some of my work some day...

Great work! ^.^
05-28-2012 04:43 AM
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RE: Internal Struggle
Im interested in your use of the word "falling" to indicate the movement of the alien spacecraft. Its a bit misleading, as falling implies uncontrolled descent. Perhaps running from them is not such a bad choice? You can't fight gravity.
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07-10-2012 10:08 AM
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RE: Internal Struggle
(07-10-2012 10:08 AM)Mournival Wrote:  Im interested in your use of the word "falling" to indicate the movement of the alien spacecraft. Its a bit misleading, as falling implies uncontrolled descent. Perhaps running from them is not such a bad choice? You can't fight gravity.
Mourn, Haven't you watched "Battle, Los Angelos" yet?
07-10-2012 11:07 AM
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RE: Internal Struggle
8D ooh~ I like it! Nice job.
10-09-2012 04:01 AM
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RE: Internal Struggle
you know it's good when it gets replies a year later
Quote: Do you hear the Whisper Men The Whisper Men are near
If you hear the Whisper Men then turn away your ears
Do not hear the Whisper Men whatever else you do
For once you've heard the Whisper Men they'll stop. And look at you.
10-12-2012 03:35 AM
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RE: Internal Struggle
Very good poem, well written and rhythmic. Even if the first part sounds like it came from a video game. I have never actually heard a poem about aliens before so it is new and creative. Although Internal Struggle does not really match the feeling or view I get from the poem. I get a more Mass Effect look where you are cornered and have to battle and as a commander you must lead others to victory and still look at yourself afterwards and know you did the right thing.

Just an opinion though.
02-20-2013 01:14 AM
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huh? odd poem.
10-22-2013 08:15 AM
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RE: Internal Struggle
That was beautiful y_y make more! Big Grin
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10-22-2013 09:27 AM
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(10-12-2012 03:35 AM)orboknown Wrote:  you know it's good when it gets replies a year later

And every year after that.
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@Nitz_X u really should leave this game
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10-22-2013 10:24 AM
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lolSmile
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10-22-2013 11:08 AM
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Very nice job Snoozn Wink Next year, it shall be replied to once again...
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10-22-2013 03:22 PM
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RE: Internal Struggle
(11-12-2011 02:55 PM)Snoozn Wrote:  In high school I had to write a poem for a class. My teacher sent it to a publisher and it ended up being published. I own the copywrite.

Not bad. This poem is decent enough. It would be nice if it was expanded into a short story.
10-22-2013 03:27 PM
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